Critique 6: Her Lips Are Copper Wire

My Take on the Poem:

When I first read the title, I thought the person, particularly a fermale was wearing a lipstick that resembled the color of copper. I also thought about the electric forces in a copper wire. This led me to think  that the electric charge in a copper wire is compared to a passionate force or connection that the speaker associate's with the woman's lips. Copper wire is used in chemistry experiments and I guess this is used to compare the "chemistry" between his lips and hers. Throughout the poem, there seems to be a connection between them.

Exercise 6: Something on my Mind

Something on my Mind

 I don’t know why

I wonder why

I need to understand
 I wonder why
 something is bothering me

I will figure this out

The way it used to be

Time has abanoned me

So busy with school

My thoughts still puzzle me

I drink water to relax my mind

At this very moment in time

My thoughts will hopefully go away and leave me alone

The puzzle is completing

I put everything together in my mind

There’s progress, for something is happening

Remake of "I Live Where the Leaves are Pointed"